The ancient words say, “kung fu is outside the poem”, but the five words of wisdom are harsh, and they are gravitated into the words。
Gertrude does not create restraints, but rather sets the rhythm of natural breathing in the poems, allowing the tone to be used to keep the tone down。
There is also a rule for rewriting poetry: to build a whole skeleton, then to refine keywords, not to rewrite them easily, but only in the eye and image, which is an efficient way of writing poetry。
Original versus final
Original text:
White walls towards the sky, clouds of drawings。
It's just a few years away。
Final:
White walls towards the sky, white clouds as snow。
The building is up and running for years。
Word-and-image analysis
First sentence: white wall to the sky
The two sentences are completely retained。
The white walls are bright and bright, and a word “to” is plain and clear, and the scenery is clear and clean without change。
Second sentence: flowing clouds for drawings
It's an imitation。
The “paper” is a handyman that brings in the chiropractor's air; the “snowpaper” uses the natural white snow to flow the clouds, to fit the true cloud and to carry its own high-precious aerobics。
It is better to write with the likeness of the heavens and the earth, and not with the likeness of man, than with the likeness of the ancient aesthetics of the oneness of heaven, and the pureness of the earth。
In the third sentence, the building is high and high
Full skeleton support sentence, as it is。
It echoes the pretense of the first floor, and it is written with the word “outside”; it is calm, it is solid, it is inspired, it needs no engraving。
Fourth sentence: watch the years, watch the years
It's a verb. It's a verb。
It is not appropriate to be brief and brief. “looking” is just an ordinary bystander that flows to the surface; “reading” is something that reads, understands, passes through, and transforms people into wise men who view the world, from mere writings to mere possessions, with white and long tastes。
Panorama
This poem starts with the following quote:
Ping, ping, ping, ping。
Ping-ping, ping-ping。
The final sentence is the same, and there is a smooth transition. The third sentence ends in a convulsion, with its hymn and its hymns resonating; and it is hymn, so that it fits the mind of all poets, so that it is not just a hymn。
The good poems are based on the facts, the false words: write the scenes and hide them in the realm, not broken, and sweet。
It's the way it's supposed to be。
Following the idea of a first-hand skeleton, a second image, and then a second verb, balancing a flat form of beauty with the inner-mindedness of the image, it is possible to sharpen an ordinary little poem, to sharpen the tone of the tone and to demagogue。
